Planet Unrealm - Notes, etc.

[Xadhoom]

im going to bring my story line of Xadhoom (the name means "creditor", might rename her to Xado) to be closely to the others line.

Lordkhanie had massed upp a good pice of amry(wisch as far as i got it not attacked yet ???) im going to put down Xadhoom there (well thats my thought, though i might change it)

 

[Omega-Seven]

oh.......um......

ya...i was always kinda just waiting for some to take up the glove... actually that, and I forgot i still had active characters. And then i was playing BG2. and I could go on, but i'm not going to =)

So I guess I will continue with my little side story (at least, finish it up). But of lately, I have written a new first post, a second unrealm story, which takes a little from the Rifts-Phase World storyline (Palladium Books, a paper and pencil RPG, but i wont be using much more than world and racial information.... stats and blah blah blah is all very tedious on a forum). I will also be borrowing from other video games and anime (i mean, why not? I've already borrowed for the world creation...).

More information on Phase world itself will be forthcoming, as well as some junk on character types (mostly stuff like, no superpowers which totally prevent you from being hurt and allow you to kill anything with just one whisper) but I'm hungry and after i post my new world, I will be cooking lunch. Broiled Eggplant in Garlic-Soy sauce. Very good, if you want the recipe, I will dig up my old Jing Style cooking thread and add it.

 

[Xadhoom]

does that mean we gonna leave (first?) unrealm? OR?
shall we try to make a quick finish of it?

just curios...

i think it would be fun to finish the first story i think it could be finnished quickly (though it would not be fun).....

 

[Omega-Seven]

no no no no no no no no no

Chronicles of the Unrealm continues on it's own... people still play in it.

The reason Neo-Unrealm is called 'The Second Story' is because that is just what it is... a second story that takes places in a different environment. It takes place in the megaverse (whereas the universe refers to all planets and galaxies, etc., the mega verse refers to all alternate universes) Also, the rules, system, yadda yadda yadda are all a little different in Neo unrealm.

So please, keep Chronicles of the Unrealm (the First Story) running. I kind of envision Chronicles happening far in the past and Neo-Unrealm far in the future, though that is not necessarily so. The possibilities for crossovers and cameo appearances definitely exist, due to the vast number of rift gates on phase world and the chatoic strangeness of Unrealm (which I think is what we called the planet Chronicles takes place on).

 

[Xadhoom]

YES

Oki...

then i will try to countinue on my story when i get home from work...

 

[Xadhoom]

i have once again terrorized the unrealm

well i hope that i have writen more to the like of the others here on the unrealm and i hope i wont be just a crapy character but actualy supply something to the story...

Wath do you think? its only a short pice yet but i wanted to make it short so you could estimate the quality of my writing and comment it... (if you think it suck say so.. iwont be offended) honest oppinons are welcome... if i get it now i might improve till the next post...

 

[PsychoMoggieBagpuss]

Heh
Posted again.

 

[PsychoMoggieBagpuss]

In case you hadn't noticed

I posted on the unrealm thread again.
Trying to get this huge battle kicking off at S'mon Trask (where from reading I assume most of the rest of the pc's are - apart from Mirya, HAL2k01 and Khaine who are at the port city of Al'Dareyth which Asteph'theroc has just left). Due to a complete lack of involvement by LK with his character Khaine I intend to have him diced by a shadowfiend/demon/whatever takes your fancy in a couple of pages. Maybe Mirya (WAnks character) could be there when it happens?
I'll leave Taskmasters character out of this (respecting his wishes) and Xadhoom hasn't posted where his character is yet. Maybe Taskmaster has just pulled himself out of the village that got annihilated by the passing army?
Whether the necromancer/spider people et al are in the city or outside I'm not sure either. If they're outside are they on the side of the city with the approaching (invisable) army or the other side of the city (talk about being between a rock and a hard place )?

Any ideas people?

 

[Xadhoom]

i havent decided where my character is. But i would like to participate in the battle but as it is right now i dont think that is possible

hmm does Taskmasters character be around mine? i have left some room for him joining me now but if you dont want to i will let her kick the guys ass....

Please drop a note if there is something you like/dislike in my writing.

In terms of how you write... the only thing I would change is the need to explain every action, especially 'because this...because that...' That's all (and my honest opinion; i hope you aren't offended).

this was from jing i didnt realy understand right then wath you meant but rereading my posts i think i know what you meant. but that style is something i probably will suffer from even when i trying to avoid it.
its the way i am, i always want to explain everything and i dont feal comfortable when leaving something unexplained..

this doesnt mean i wont try to change though...

 

[PsychoMoggieBagpuss]

Hey Xadhoom

Nothings wrong with your story ... it just gets confusing when you mix the past/present tense

If I get a chance tomorrow I'll email you a slightly rewritten version of your posts (just punctuation/grammar corrections basically) to do with what you will, either edit your posts slightly or completely replace, whatever you want

You might have noticed we've been leaving a lot of stuff unexplained. We've been doing this to leave the way open for new characters to join in or events to get thrown in to explain them when someone has a monet of inspiration (very rare ). So leave some stuff about Xadhoom unexplained, makes her more "mysterious". If you feel the need to explain your characters motivations/reasoning stick them in this "notes" thread.

I'll try and email you tomorrow anyway.

Have fun

 

[PsychoMoggieBagpuss]

RumpleForeskin Here (nick change ...again)

Ok, here's what I figure

Al'Dareyth, capital city and main port of the countrey Dareythia.
Current "residents" Mirya, HAL2k and Khaine. Probably little or no chance of making it back to S'mon Trask for the upcoming battle, unless Mirya manages to "liberate" a flying carpet from somewhere

S'mon Trask
Current "residents" - Wolfram, Isis, Freyja are known to be in the city (though Wolfram is obviously seperated from Isis and Freyja at the moment)

Sir Damon Vanderwal the paladin, Qu'ean Quicksilver, Helmut von Swartzentodder, Tzchee-inki and her Ash-en entourage are probably back in the city. Most likely (going from Jings description of the city) the Ash-en be hanging out on the west bank with all the other non-humans due to the Ash-en not looking very humanoid.

What happened to Rufus, Chun-Li, Du-de-es-ta and the red dragon I don't know (due to lack of posts). The RD could still be unconsious outside the city (Wolfram punched him pretty hard ), or could have been turned into steak.
Dragon Burger anyone?

Asteph'theroc is on his way to meet Wolfram and will probably arrive just in time to help/shout some advice to Wolfram that will enable him to turn the tables on the Shadowfiend (probably won't fight it directly, I'm thinking of having some sort of non-aggression pact between Asteph'therocs race and the Shadowfiends ...sort of like the Cho-ja and Tsuranni from Raymond Feists Empire series, i.e. I can't twat them till they attack me first and break the pact).

Obviously our characters are unaware of the big build up happening, they'll probably notice when the diversionary force "decloaks". Whilst this fighting is going on maybe one of the characters will notice strange sound coming from under the floor in an old building/inn/whorehouse somewhere and investigate?

What do people want there characters do be doing in this upcoming battle?
Repelling invaders from the city walls?
Protecting city elders from assassins (maybe some "swashbuckling" style of fighting ... swinging from chandeliers, witty repartee etc?)
Making outward sorties to take the fight to the enemy?
Tunnel fighting in the sewers with dark elves?

How we going to fight (and win) a war fought on two fronts?

I had an idea about flooding the sewers with some type of flammable oil, but then I thought residents of S'mon Trask would probably be a bit arsed of with us if we torched their city.....then again .... anyone bring any marshmellows?

 

[Xadhoom]

Sounds like its heating up

btw how do you think i would be like if the man xadhoom found was a Drew(?). then - after she have kicked his ass - she might need to run to the city for the rest of the army.

i will write more detailed on xadhooms power and history later i think.

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remeber that she has decided to never use her magic again... thogh she might in a desperet situation use them anyway
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[PsychoMoggieBagpuss]

ummmmm

Posted more on the unrealm thread.

Is anyone else still interested/posting to the unrealm thread?

(i.e. WAnk/Hal/Jing/Wolf/Trinity/Dudestar)


Cause otherwise it just seems to me like I'm wasting my time

 

[The_Dudester]

Yo PMB...

I'm stil interested in continuing my bit of the story... just it is difficult to see what my Ash'en can do vs the supreme power of Asterpherocthingy (or whatever his name is ).

Still, I shall be making a post soon.

FYI, the Ash'en and their Necromancer buddy are currently a little outside the city limits, because the inhabitants of S'mon Trask were a little uncomfortable having them around

 

[Xadhoom]

I am... but thats only one more...

to continue the thread its almost a need to be more ppl writing to it...

i was thinking of write more on xadhoom today or tomorrow.. then i will wait till more ppl writes in it

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ops two more then..
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[PsychoMoggieBagpuss]

... just it is difficult to see what my Ash'en can do vs the supreme power of Asterpherocthingy

Thats why I keep removing him/keeping him away from the rest of the group - I'm using him more to generate a background. I've got another character in mind (a drunken dwarf with a pink mohican) which I intend to bring in soon. I'm also going to have Asteph'theroc have a non-aggression pact with the shadowfiends so he can't do diddly squat about them (apart from shout advice to the rest of the group if he's with them ....i.e. "RUN AWAY!" ). Also Asteph'theroc has to be aware and concsious of his enemies - if he gets jumped or suprised he's in as much shit initially as everyone else. He can still be stabbed/squished/burnt/pummeled/have a mountain drop on top of him - especially if he's not aware what's about to happen and doesn't have time to stick up his defences (and the only real physical defences he has got is along the lines of "hit them before they get a chance to hit me" - which when he moves damn fast is all he's ever needed so far).

Dudester - as you're outside the city your most likely to notice the approaching (diversionary) invisable army. I can't imagine the mutant spider race rely that much on eyesight so I'm guessing that they will start picking up on sounds/smells/tremors in the ground b4 any human notices anything, (preferably before the army reaches the walls and drops the invisability shield).
I also made reference in my post to the day looking like its going to be foggy - maybe this could be part of the concealment enacted by the army, or maybe it could help detecting them (you can't see invisable people, but maybe you can see the swirls in the fog that they leave?)

Anyway tell me what you think

 

[The_Dudester]

Fair enough

I guess that this means that my Ash-en get to take on the might of that evil army by themselves then?
Lucky that they have a team of "ninja" Ash-en and a Necromancer with them really (all our magick takes *time* to do and is mostly predictive - although I suppose we could manage to twist the weave slightly to give everyone very good luck for a while )

 

[The_Dudester]

One post.
Not very good, but I'm working on it.

Now... do I get help with this horde of evil, or is it up to the Ash-en and Undead to save the day?

 

[Xadhoom]

its to bad that so few ppl write to the thread.(unrealm)

the last posts have been made by The_Dudester, PsychoMoggieBagpuss|PuF and me... but i dont write good since english isnt my first laguage...
(it takes almost 1-2 hours to write somthing half decent for me )

it would be fun if more ppl would contribute to the thread...

where have all the other who have writen to the thread gone?

 

[trinity]

So we had to tell a story today in Comm. class, and everyone else told stories about betty or johnny or some sad thing like that. i told an unrealm story.... complete with a dragon.... i got mad props and an "A"

i think the computer is helping me out~!