http://cheetahblack.tripod.com/whyhaveyouchosenmetoloveyou
here is every single poem I made since 2007 and I will not stop
wow, those are just terrible.
no offense, but you might want to try considering something else.
or at least read some real poetry or stylized writing before writing anything. I don't know what english books to advise to you, but if you can read french, well I guess (hope) you already know what to read.
I have written 2 or 3 poems, and my major tip would be re-read. re-read your poem 10 times, maybe more. each minor modification of rhythm or language should lead to an overall re-reading. oh and try to have some organized poems. block of texts aren't really easy to read. try writing in blocks of verses for a change :10 verses, an additional space, 10 verses...
Angst-filled poems aren't for amateurs. those require the most work, and I don't think you can bring that to an acceptable level. try some more easy theme, try a story for example.
but please, stop putting words together like that. Even I am sensitive to the butchering of English which wants to be called "poetry".